Goes real slow
It seems that you have an interesting story to tell.. But the walls of text are pretty boring. Maybe you could narrate it while the text is shown. Since everyone hears their own voice in their head when they read, I'd suggest you put your own voice in there, and read it the way you want it to be heard.
I just happened to be in a good enough mood to read through all that, but honestly people will see how slow it's going and just close it. Add some voice if it gets blammed, and maybe even if it doesn't.